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Hi Auri

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Condemned

First Impression: I had to read the story twice two times to grasp what was presented. Silence is challenging on a good day. But even more so standing among headstones trying to process the unknown. Is heaven really attainable or hell the only option?

What needs your attention: I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues. Kudos. Probably the only suggestion I would make is the font size, I'm an older reader.

What part I liked best: Your character pushing them in the pit because of anger adrenaline. I've felt that kind of rage when my grandson died. I wanted to smash every headstone to pieces so it wouldn't be real. I wanted to choke God with my own hands.

Overall impression: I'm not sure why the author listed this as nonsense, but this reader doesn't agree. Grief is challenging to everyone and sometimes when you're the one facing a diagnose and everyone seems to be talking, judging your reactions but not really hearing the turmoil inside feels unbearable. I found your approach intriguing. The questions of heaven or hell or the lingering in between. Grief isn't the same for anyone.

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What does the Fox say?????


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .