Hi Treasure! Wow! I must say that you are a talented poet. I think you've included so many true poetic words in your poem than I've read all day! Very impressive.

Your poem is very pretty. I can envision a sun shower, with sun shining through the damp trees. I could imagine trees and flowers blowing with the gentle winds.

My favorite stanza is the one about the birds chirping. I love going out with my dogs in the morning and hearing the songs of the various birds. You showed that well in your wonderful descriptions.

My daughter sent me pictures of the Lake Taho area last week, so it's fresh in my mind. When I started reading in your poem about the mountains with their peaks touched by the sun, it made me think of that. Funny thing, though, I don't need to see an actual picture to enjoy the masterpiece of nature which you wrote about. You described it all well enough to paint that picture in your readers minds. Well done.

I also liked how you brought your readers back to the title in your ending. It gave a nice closure to your beautiful poem.

I wondered if Yorubaland is a real place, or if it's a sort of Kokamo, like the song. If it is a really place, maybe add a short notation about it. If it's not, maybe that could be added to the brief introduction, in a creative way, of course.

Speaking of which, if I can make a suggestion, I would say to change the brief introduction. Right now, you have, "Read and Enjoy". I know that you can add something more worthy of this beautiful poem - Wisp away on a feather in this dreamy poem, for example.

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