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 Time in a Bottle Open in new Window. [E]
My first try here. Short Shots entry-inspired by photo of .bottle at sea
by mama2dasha Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Name of Story: Time in a Bottle
Name of Author: mama2dasha

Hello, I found your story Time in a Bottle In Browse by Type under short stories. I am so glad that I found it. I enjoyed reading it. I am here to review and rate it, and I hope you find this feedback useful.

Title: The title fits the content of the story.

Positives: I thought you did a great job writing this story. It caught my attention from the beginning and held it to the end. You did a very good job of building up the tension. Keeping the identity of the POV as long as you did was very effective. I was surprised.

Plot: The plot grabbed my attention and held it.

Imagery: You did a great job. It was easy for me to visualize as if I were there.
Characters: Very believable.

Dialogue: Excellent

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation: I saw no issues in this area.

Overall, this was an enjoyable story told through the eyes of a wine bottle. I can not offer any suggestions for improvement because the piece does not warrant any. Well done.

Write On!

Kristina

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