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 | The Green Grass Grows  [ASR] I watch my neighbor's son Paul mow the lawn. I can't help myself...  |
| (4.0)| Hello T.S. Garp! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . Your title piqued my interest in your story, and after reading the description, I checked the rating to make sure it was a story I wanted to read.  I like how you opened your story. It had a strong beginning. Your plot moved along nicely and kept me interested, the ending was quite surprising and not what I was expecting at all. It started as a cute story that had me grinning until I came close to the end. I was thinking that's a smart kid to wear a helmet while mowing the grass. He learned his lesson and wasn't going to take any chances. Then when poor Seamus got hit, it shocked me. It made me think of how dangerous mowing the yard can be. Not only to those doing the mowing but also to anyone nearby. I know I have mowed the grass many times and had rocks spit out from underneath. Scary. I was glad to read that Seamus wasn't dead, but horrified to read what one rock with enough force can do. This story is a reminder that we never know what life will throw at us. And each day that goes by without any form of bad news or tragedies, is a day we should rejoice in! I do have a few suggestions below. Please use or discard them as you see fit.  pine tree which separatespine tree that separates  chaos is the best way chaos was the best way  fear and uncertainty and confusion fear, uncertainty, and confusion  job and a greatjob and great  post cuttingpost-cutting  kids, all of whichkids, all of whom Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it.   Intuey"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/10/2024 @ 11:10pm EDT