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 Tristeza  [E]
Response to more time with homeschool.
by LaVillegas
Review of Tristeza  
Review by StephBee
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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GAMES OF THRONES ESSAY REVIEW

This is a review for "Tristeza"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" 

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

*Reading* THE ESSAY

Written in 2020, a mother struggles with the restrictions that Covid-19 has set on the nation.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The essay tackles a very recent topical subject. It paints an accurate picture of what was going on at the time and the emotional whiplash parents had to deal with.

*Star* CONTENT

I am not familiar with the title. The essay is not long. It describes the problem and offers ideas to deal with the lockdown, but no solutions. The danger of kids leaning on the computer for interaction is a bit scary. The last part of the essay tugs on the heartstrings.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. I might also suggest increasing the font to make it easier for the reader's eyes on WDC.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I think a lot of parents can connect with the author's push/pull of acknowledging their children seek a cortisol boost by being on the computer doing other things than homework and wanting to offer them something other than the quick, addictive fix.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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