Hello Zoe, I just visited your port and read Echoes of Tomorrow - Part One. I enjoyed reading it very much. I hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression - I was very impressed with your story. It captured my attention from the start and held it to the end. I thought you described the setting very well, and it was easy to feel the main character, Skylar Arc, hurt and frustrated.

Title: - The title fits the content of the story.

Premise: - Transforming her grief into action, Skylar Arc adopts Nightingale's persona.

Plot: This story's plot is about a young girl grieving over the death of her parents. They were both killed in an explosion that was planned. Their work and their dreams were destroyed. She decided to avenge their deaths by fighting the corruption that had killed them. This plot interested me very much.

Format: The piece is formatted to make it easy to read and understand.

Dialogue: The dialogue flowed very smoothly

Characters: I have only met the main character, Skylar Arc. She is very believable.

Scene/Setting: Both work very well together.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues within this area.

Suggestions: I cannot offer any because the piece does not warrant it. I felt it was very good and well-written.

Write On!

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Kristina

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