Hello, J Cosmos!

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I thought it'd be fun to close out this month with a review of one of your Express it in Eight poems. I liked this one so selected it for the review. I hope you enjoy this celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.



INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I enjoyed reading your poem about living mindfully. Well done!

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. Well done!



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

My favorite line of this mindful poem of yours was:
"live each day fresh."
I think that's great advice. Well done!

You offer some great advice on mindful living and life in general in this short, eight-line poem of yours. Well done!

I liked that you included the prompts at the end too. Well done!

I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your mindful living poem. Well done!



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness (and because of the rules of a review challenge I'm in), I have a few little suggestions to make your piece stronger. I'm having to dig deep for these as I really thought your piece was well done as it is though. So if you want to skip this part, no worries at all!

I didn't really understand the last line's meaning? It is:
"die before you live."
I've heard the phrase "live before you die" before. I wondered if that's what you meant? Or something else? Or maybe you meant to have "don't" at the start of the line? That would make sense to me. Anyway, I might just be a dunce here, but I thought I'd share my point of confusion, in case I'm not the only one.

I would recommend including a note that the three capitalized lines at the bottom are prompts from the Express it in Eight challenge. I know that they are, because I'm a sometimes participant there, but not everyone does. It would be helpful to those who don't, I think, to have it clearly spelled out.



CONCLUSION:
You have a nice writing style and I enjoy reading your work / posts / poems. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time, community spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May mindfulness, love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler











Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 







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