Starlight’s Journey [E] Through the depths of space |
Greetings, Prosperous Snow celebrating . I'm Jace, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Starlight’s Journey" for the "~ The Poet's Place Cafe~" group. Form. You offered up a Cameo poem, a poem with seven lines of 2, 5, 8, 3, 8, 7, 2 syllables for each line. I've never heard of this form before. Well done with the format. Overall Impression. I think your subject was inspired and used this format well. I wonder why certain words were in bold. Were you following a contest prompt? Technical or Editorial Considerations. I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your poem. I had a problem with your use of the word "bawls". Being uncertain of its meaning, I looked up the definition. The only thing that came up was to 'cry out loudly'. This seemed at odds with the quiet of space. Rating. 4.5. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinions. Reviewed by JACE My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" . My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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