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Greetings, icracra.

I'm Jace, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. for the "~ The Poet's Place Cafe~" Open in new Window. group. *Smile*

*Puzzle4* Form. Your offering is a short free form verse. While short, though, it tells a complete story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I think you title gives away too much. I suggest you shorten it to One Word. As is, a reader doesn't have to even read your poem. Leave the punchline (for lack of a better word) IN your poem.

*Exclaim* Technical or Editorial Considerations. I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your poem.

         *Bullet* The only change I'd suggest to your poem body is move the word God to its own line ending your poem. It will make a stronger statement in my opinion.   

*Heart* My Rating: 4.0. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinions.


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