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 Shadows Torn Asunder Open in new Window. [E]
Damon & Rayne confront dark secrets in a world where dreams hold the key to life and death
by Cassandra Christie Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I’ve seen this on the Read a Newbie sidebar for a while and thought it looked interesting, but I wasn’t sure how long it would be or how much time it would take to read and review.

Wow, what a tale. I loved every bit of it: your descriptions are vivid and clear, the worldbuilding makes sense, and the story progresses with tension, mystery and excitement. My only desire is to read more of it and plumb the dark secrets that may lie between the two intriguing characters you’ve drawn for us. Is this the opening to a longer novella or series? If so, please keep it going! You have tons of potential here. It reads like a movie.

Your formatting is quite basic, but I understand as a newbie you’re probably not familiar with how to tidy up the text block here on WdC *Smile* All you have to do is select your desired text portion and click on the various little boxes lined up over the text entry form. Those are the keys to basic formatting here. I always recommend size 4 Verdana font, and since you switch between POVs I would suggest underlining the characters names and chapter headings as they change. Also, perhaps a word count in the subtitle, if there’s room, would let people know how long it is so they can decide if they have time to read it and give feedback in one sitting.

Your third chosen genre is romance/love, which offers some clue as to the rest of the story. Damon really clicked with me; I have characters like him in my head and perhaps floating around my portfolio as well *Wink* He and Rayne are fascinating. I won’t repeat myself any further… *Laugh* Great work!

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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