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Review #4738818
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 My Life Open in new Window. [E]
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by strlcuckoo Author Icon
Review of My Life  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, and I apologize for almost forgetting about your review request! Thank you for asking for it.

I’ll get the boring formatting suggestions out of the way first… size 4 Verdana font, perhaps centered text, and possibly a line count at the bottom in case you would like to enter it into "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. or "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest" Open in new Window.. Two more genres might also be added; I would suggest “Personal” and “Relationship” or “Family.”

Your poetic structure is a little confusing, as I didn’t feel a clearly measured “beat,” yet some of the lines ended in rhymes… oh, I see now upon closer examination: alternate lines throughout end in an approximate “old” sound, which ties the poem together well, is appropriate for the subject matter and perhaps hints at the deeper meaning.

Lines vary in length but are mostly pretty long, which is why I suggest centering the font to balance them out across the page.

Your theme is relatable, as we all wonder about the significance of the paths we’ve chosen in life and what would have happened if we’d gone a different route. Overall it’s an interesting and well expressed item, with some sadness at the end as we see the narrator realizing that his choices may not have been the best and wondering how to correct course.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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