Hello Steven Gepp!

I just finished reading these most current chapter (twenty one), so I'm here to do your review. I hope you enjoy it and find it helpful, encouraging and uplifting.


My thoughts on this chapter:

As you specifically asked about pacing, here are my thoughts as regards to that: there were a couple places where I stopped reading and re-read what was written, but I think that's just the USA/ Australian thing, making me wonder if it was correct. I'm sure it was, as your English is fantastic and my knowledge of the difference in dialects minuscule.


I could understand Kathy's shock.


I could understand Sally's despair.


I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your chapter.

Your story chapter was interesting to me, and made me want to read your next installment. Well done!



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:

I don't really have any suggested changes. I would like to be more helpful; perhaps in the next chapter I can be.


CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and I easily got drawn into the story. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler








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A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .