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This is a charming poem with a gentle metric flow evoking the feel of the soft winds it describes. I enjoyed reading it and think it’s very pretty. Poetry that is elegant and speaks of nature and beauty is always good to read; I know a lot of people in my literature books write “rebellious” poetry that deals with sordid topics, but I feel as if that’s almost missing the point of it. Of course a lot of that depends on the undergirding worldview of the item; if one is sincerely trying to convey a positive message about painful things, or simply sharing their feelings, then I would treat it respectfully.

Which all has little bearing on your item… I noticed it seems to have a rather sloppy layout, with lines joined onto each other that should probably be set apart with an uppercase leading letter. The word “nature’s” which opens the second verse lacks the apostrophe that it needs. And the word “carriers” in the sixth line should be “carries.” Generally speaking you may want to consider pasting this into Grammarly for some simple suggestions, though I dread to imagine what they would make of a poem. Feel free to ignore them if they tell you to modify your vocabulary or otherwise disrupt what you’ve created. Simple punctuation goes a long way.

Formatting is also important, especially around here where “default” is rather cramped and boring in appearance. I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. You can also center the text so it becomes the primary focus of the page, and with a nice nature theme like this, you might enjoy experimenting with different font colors to give it more visual appeal.

Other than that, it’s perfectly lovely.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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