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 Healing Waters Open in new Window. [13+]
A metaphorical journey of life, that begins with small stream
by pennman Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings,

This is an elegant poem that encompasses a broad theme, of life’s transitions as seen through the lens of nature and different bodies of water. The ideas build upon themselves, as the narrator matures from the laughing innocent playfulness of streams and brooks to the stern seriousness of the potentially dangerous river, and then into the peaceful solitude of the lake in old age, and from there to the final dissolution into the great unknown of the ocean.

I don’t have much to offer when it comes to poetry; I personally dislike counting syllables and measuring meter, preferring to go with either free verse or sheer instinct when building poems. So I’m not qualified to advise you on structure and form. But I do know a good poem when I see one. Your verses flow well, and the concepts are easy to grasp.

Formatting advice is easy to give around here; I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. Perhaps you can center and underline the title header, and include a line count at the bottom to prepare yourself in case you want to enter any poetry contests. You may enjoy experimenting with different font colors to enhance the theme and make it look prettier on the screen.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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