Hello Steven Gepp!

I just finished reading these two chapters (nineteen and twenty), so I'm here to do your review. I hope you enjoy it and find it encouraging and uplifting.


As you specifically asked about pacing, here are my thoughts as regards to these two chapters: They kept my attention, for the most part. I did get distracted a couple times but I think that was more because someone was making noise than the writing.

I liked that Sally had an alternate healing method for herself. Creative of you.


In chapter 20, I wondered where Kathy had gone? Maybe my attention was diverted and she left in chapter 19 and I missed it?

It wasn't clear to me in the end of chapter 19, who was in bed with Scott. Maybe that was on purpose? It became clear in chapter 20. But not knowing where Kathy was, was distracting. Did she go home? Was she in another room? Something else?


I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your two chapters. Well done!



CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and I easily got drawn into the story. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler








Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .