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 A Day in the Life of Alex Open in new Window. [E]
Venturing out into the bustling streets, Alex found himself.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I love this image you’ve created for us of someone who has built a beautiful world within a world (within a world.) Alex is writing and creating stories within the warmth, solitude and safety of his apartment, nestled within the security and nearness of a bustling city. This is a vignette of the kind of life I dream of having, removed from the stresses of having to deal personally with others, yet near enough to be able to observe and partake in the multitude of human emotions which inspire me. My only desire would be to be more connected to nature, perhaps (in the context of the city) having a rooftop garden to retire to.

This item has no dialogue, but since it’s solely focused on Alex, there isn’t need for any. I am reminded of the Danish concept of hygge with stories like these: flash fictions with no particular drama or conflict, no “goals, stakes and obstacles” as is usually expected in storytelling. Instead we are presented with a vignette that elicits feelings of comfort and happiness. There’s nothing wrong with that; in fact, it’s quite poetic and creative.

I’ll make the usual recommendations for size 4 Verdana font, a word count in the subtitle or the top of the item, and perhaps a reconsideration of the chosen genres. “Dark” doesn’t seem to apply here. And “Technology” implies a sort of science fiction theme. Aside from that everything is perfect, almost suspiciously so *Laugh* *Martian*

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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