It starts out with them going to school. Drew had a dream and Valerie understood that. At school they went to class. Valerie prepared for leading the class discussion. She mentioned birth year which wasn't in the textbook. Then lunch came and they say by Rob. Rob gave Drew cleats to wear for football. Then, after school, they went to the football game. Drew put on his uniform and went on offense. His team went first. He didn't stand out during the game for the most part. Then the coach wanted him on defense. He agreed to middle back. Then Valerie tried explaining to coach he was trying his hardest. In the end they had lost the game, as shown by coach being upset. Then what Drew said caused players to laugh hard coach planned laps and pushups for practice Monday. Then they were dismissed. Valerie planned to wait on bleachers for Drew.

Great details. Looks like the dream won't happen yet. Even though they lost, Drew played perfect. Not too much attention. I remember playing in pep band at football games in highschool so might be okay to add that detail in just a sentence or two. Home games or away games. No spelling or grammar errors found. Good job and keep up the good work!

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