Hello Steven Gepp!

Thanks again for the beta reader opportunity on this urban dragon novel of yours. I just finished reading this installment - chapter fourteen, so I'm here to do your review. I hope you enjoy it and find it encouraging and uplifting.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I enjoyed most of this chapter and am looking forward to the next installment. Well done!

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. Well done!



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

I guess I'm hoping that Sally will turn out to be a dragon, so there can be good dragons too... I'm in more of the love dragons camp. I'm not getting that vibe though.

I'm wondering why Sally's people aren't helping her? Is she the only warrior amongst them?

The fight scene felt realistic for the situation. Well done!


I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your new chapter. Well done!


Your story chapter was interesting to me, and kept my attention riveted right to the last word. Well done!



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
Like with the previous reviews, I'll just mention the little weird or nit picky things that made me stop reading.

In this sentence, I think it's missing an end quote: “I feared this would occur, and they did.
Easy peasy to fix, should you choose to do so.

Only one little nit picky thing! Super


CONCLUSION:
You have an attention-grabbing writing style and I easily got drawn into the story. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler








Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .