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Mr. Green Eyes Open in new Window. [E]
True story about my boyfriend pictured here in a blue shirt, a VW bug, and a lot of sand.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and happy account anniversary month!

This is a nifty story, one that catches us up in a teeny bopper human interest saga that is both universal and special.

You describe the details clearly and with sincerity; is this biographical or simply fictional? Whose picture is that? You have placed us firmly in a certain era, which is easy to visualize.

You've already heeded the usual suggestions for genre selection and large clear font. My only issue might be that the end isn't quite clear enough. Did she continue the relationship by asking him for an explanation, or was that her way of cutting it off?

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Heartb*



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