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 Georgia Smiles  [E]
Acrostic, holistic observance of my wee one's morning ritual of wonder and discovery.
by Carol, Bride of Writingstein
Review of Georgia Smiles  
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Hallo!
This one showed up on 'read and review' and I'm glad it did! It made me smile, too!! *Smile*

I love the acrostic form. The tone of the poem is soft, echoing your emotions. One can picture the child as she readies for the day. I especially like the part about her being allowed to think she's the first to discover various aspects of nature.

Suggestions:
1. Do pick some genres, to give this poem more exposure on site.
2. In the first verse, the line starting 'reporting' made me progress ahead to the end of the day, then I had to flip and go back to the beginning. (On the second read I got where it fitted in, but I thought I'd let you know it took two reads.)
3. You wrote this a while ago - perhaps a little note about Georgia now, so we can watch her grow ... ?

Thanks for sharing this lovely poem!
Write On
- Sonali

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