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 |  | My Haikus!  [13+] The Collection of My Haikus ( Familiar Form )  |
  Hello, The Sun SmilesOn Small Valley! Happy WdC Anniversary from "Anniversary Reviews" !  Overall Impression:This a poignant piece that made me stop and reflect. Excellent writing. Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:The haiku reads very well. I find many jarring, but yours flows nicely, and the only jarring thing about it is the message of the final line (which is a good thing!). Content:I was surprised by how much story was contained in such a short piece. I know haiku is intended to do that, but it's rare I find one that makes me stop and play out an entire socioeconomic concern in my head. The poem may be an older piece, but it's incredibly relevant even today. Perhaps even more so than when it was written. Grammar and Mechanics:Looks good to me. Final Thoughts:This is thought-provoking and will stay with the reader for a while. Great work. Thank you for sharing your work with us! JayNaNoOhNo   My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim"
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You responded to this review 02/28/2024 @ 12:13am EST