GegenReaktion [13+] Life's brevity, fading connections, societal disillusionment, personal introspection |
An Angel Army Review Hi TödesFlug . I'm Polter-JACE: Cruising ... , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "GegenReaktion" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story. Overall Impression. First, welcome to Writing.com. I noticed you joined on 1 Jan--was that by design or accident? I found your anguish poignant. I'm sure many folk hold similar feeling because of the present societal norms. I hate that "norm" is even used to reflect today. Perhaps your writing style--short, incomplete sentence structure--is by design. But as a reader, I found it challenging to read, beginning with your title. I've taken some time just to ponder it, yet I'm still puzzled by it. What does Gegen- signify? Notwithstanding my proclivities for the written word and its proper (to my mind) structure, I found your lament about society today to be spot on. Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. I won't cite specific structure issues here; I suspect you know about what I speak. Favorite Part. Only time will tell. Wonder if change is destiny or doom. My Rating. 4.5. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion. Reviewed by JACE My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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