This is a great story. It feels like the opening/intro to a Fantasy epic where it starts off on in a remote location and expands into a greater epic. I think you did a beautiful job of setting up the character's background and storylines. There was some great descriptions describing the location and sunrise. The subtle details made the world being described more compelling. The politics set up in this story are really interesting with a dispute for the crown. It seems like there may be some foul play involved Xristan's (Prince Elmund's) Sister in Law vying to keep the crown for herself.

The story also ended with a good hook. It would be great to read more of this... I hope that you continue the storyline.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .