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 Ye Who Camps Alone Open in new Window. [E]
Just a miniature implied-horror short to try and stretch my writing muscles
by Pinterra Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I found this on the Read a Newbie sidebar and thought it would make a quick evening read.

Your descriptions are excellent, showing us the eerie and unnerving portentions of doom (hmm, I think I just made up a word… *Laugh*) Anyway, your words create a clear picture in our minds of just how creepy the situation is. I always feel that the usage of “you” as the point of view in writing is a bit weird, as if we’re embarking on a Choose Your Own Adventure (or come to think of it one of the WdC interactive stories) But that’s just me; I can understand how the first person or third person would perhaps water down the effect.

If you wanted to expand this, though, it would probably be a good idea to choose a more standard POV to make it easier to read.

Speaking of easy reading, I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font for readability across devices.

I see you’ve chosen three relevant genres, which is always recommended so you get more chances at being nominated for Quill Awards.

The title does a great job of explaining and adding detail to the item, as well.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *HeartBl*


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