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Miracles Do Happen  [E]
He never did believe in miracles, even when they happened right in front of him.
by Kenzie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Kenzie .

I'm Polter-JACE: Cruising ... , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Miracles Do Happen" , which was found on the Read & Review feature.

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I guess it takes all kinds to make up this great world. I'm now retired and taking time to look back on my life, hoping to write about some of the things that happened in my life for my kids and grandkids. I wasn't as stubborn as your ex-, but I did often overlook things that Laura, my ex-, claimed as miracles.

Looking back I have to wonder how I survived as long as I have if miracles didn't happen. Laura would say God had more in mind for you and your family.

Your description of events placed me in the car with you. I believe coming to terms of one's mortality in just seconds has to open one's eyes.

Your Note made me angry knowing nothing happened to that driver. I fear for a society that won't take steps to safeguard it's members.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* I found no problems with the technical aspects of your writing. Great job.   

         *Bullet* One thing you might edit--you have an Invalid link of a contest in your piece.  

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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