Icy Hand [E] Just once I bow to cliche. |
An Angel Army Review Hi Lou-Here By His Grace . I'm Polter-JACE: Cruising ... , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Icy Hand" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story. Overall Impression. While I can't say it's my favorite season, I do enjoy winter. I spent most of my formative years growing up in Maine. Now I live in south-central Missouri where snow seldom makes an appreciable appearance. You mention 27 counties of North Dakota in your opening and closing. I wondered why that number is significant, so I looked up the total number of counties--it's 53. Are they northern counties? There is something very comforting about sitting snugly in a warm house listening to the winter rage outside. You set a vivid picture of this. Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. To make your paragraph read correctly, you need to set the clauses apart with proper punctuation. Without it, it's awkward to read. In a warm house with ones you love and dinner slowly cooking in a crock-pot, winter seems tamed and vague, A problem to worry about and be attacked with big shovels and ice scrapers on the morrow. This phrase needs a hyphen. drift making drift-making My Rating. 4.5. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion. Reviewed by JACE My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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