'Mood Haiku' is a good little poem. There is no doubt about it. But there are some technical errors in this tiny poetic effort. So it cannot be a traditional Japanese Haiku.
The summary of the poetry...
The narrator of the poetry is in tremendous mental stress. So can not live a meaningful smooth life. Therefore, existence is so heavy and painful.
I especially like...
How easily the poet expresses the sad mood and helplessness of the teller. In real life, we, the people of the material world, often face these types of situations.
After reading this poetry, I feel...
The style of writing is good. But, there is not the slightest ray of a positive message. But, there is a clear image of the human mind which is truly appreciable.
Technical errors:-
However, that poetry perfectly obeys the rules of syllables, line numbers etcetera. But, the purpose of a Haiku does not follow which is very crucial, too. The purpose of Haiku is nothing but to draw an image of Mother Nature. That does not follow here. The poet draws the image of the human mind which is a characteristic of an ideal Senryu. It is also another Japanese form of tiny poetry. It is a great technical mistake. So it is not a Haiku, but it is a Senryu.
About the poet...
Those errors can be rectified. So, there is no scope for frustration.
Keep writing.


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