Greetings,

A simple short story about an unhappy boy who feels like a failure when he thinks he hasn’t won the contest. I enjoyed reading it, but I do have some suggestions.

First, your writing style feels quite stilted and uncertain, as though you were perhaps an English language learner. You can use Grammarly, a free online writing assistant, to help you hone your skills in writing tone and grammar.

Second, this is a very brief story. It lacks any particular character development or conflict. I like to think of stories in terms of characters, goals, stakes and obstacles. Those are the ingredients that make us want to keep reading.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing


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