Greetings and happy account anniversary!

I really enjoyed this short story about a guy who wanders off the path both physically and metaphorically and is set right by an unexpected figure.

Your descriptions are clear and the writing flows well. The ending is nice; I figured the girl must be some kind of forest fairy or an angel. I like how carefully you pictured the two characters, especially the color of their skin and hair… most stories I’ve seen here tend to default to Caucasian people innocently enough. Good to find a bit of diversity.

I usually recommend using size 4 font to ensure readability across devices. And a word count at the beginning or in the subtitle would help us know what we’re getting into (though one could just as easily skim down the page to see how long it is.)

I also like to tell people to choose three relevant genres for their items; it helps them be nominated for a Quill Award, and it helps people find the items when they’re browsing. You could choose “Comedy,” “Career,” and “Fantasy” for this one.

Thanks for sharing, take care, and keep writing


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