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The sad, sorry, one star fate of books
by Elisa: Stik or Treat
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NOTE FROM THE REVIEWER: ▼

*Frown*

Oh my goodness, what a way to view books!

And yet, I can't help admitting it's valid.

You paint a powerful word picture. The metaphors are apt and your verse structure and words echo your mood.

The verse about termites had me cringing and the last line left me gasping. But I can't figure it out, so 'you' are a termite? (Sorry, am I missing something?)

Also, while the poem works as is and gets 5 stars from me - one part of my mind was distracted by the fact that there are now other ways of reading books, than on paper. I somehow felt I'd like to have seen a verse about that.

And I'm hesitating about saying 'Write On' - does that mean more tattooing? *Smile*

Look at the piggie -- Kiya drew him, and Secret Squirrel gifted him to me! Thank you!!

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