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 crazy  [E]
a short love poem
by sierra
Review of crazy  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§amaCabre


Hallo and welcome to Writing Dot Com!

This poem showed up on 'read and review'.

I really enjoyed it! I like the way you start with your feelings about the word 'crazy' and go on to talk about your feelings for the perfect boy! I was smiling through the latter half.

Suggestions . Questions:
1. The first line is a bit difficult to read and 'that's' needs an apostrophe. You may want to look at it again.

Have you left the word "I" as small letter i as a style choice? What about the way you've written "I'm", is that a style choice, too?

When you said 'him and I being crazy' I thought it would lead on to each of you being crazy about the other, instead it was about the pairing being crazy. Have you purposely left it open to interpretaiton?

You might want to use some Writing ML like font, size, colour.

Thanks for sharing this delightful poem!
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