First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Artemis standing atop the knoll. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I suggest placing a blank line between the paragraphs so that the story is easier to read.
I like: My favorite part is the climax. I like this part because it showed Artemis at his best.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the action.
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