An Angel Army Review Good morning, rupali. I found your offering on the Read & Review section. I'm Polter-JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Invalid Item" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story. Overall Impression. I understand that English is not your primary language but feel that you do well with it. I know a smattering of several languages--enough to get around and order dinner--but would never try conversational writing. I applaud your efforts. I'm a little confused about your format. It seems written as a free form poem yet reads like a story. That distracted me as a reader. I don't think you really followed the prompt. It seemed you wrote more of your response to him, rather than by him. I don't know what 'egoclass' means. Some other suggestions for wording: But weren't interested in getting a divorce. Five years passed away quickly. But keeps silent. He pauses for a moment. I can't live without living without you, | I don't know what you're trying to say here. I keep calm. Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. Use quotation marks on all lines of dialogue, not just the first line. My Rating. 3.5. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion. Reviewed by JACE My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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