Dear Me [E] A letter to myself. |
An Angel Army Review Good morning, Mary Ann MCPhedran . I found this piece in the nRead & Review section. I'm Polter-JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Dear Me" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story. Overall Impression. I like reading Dear Me letters. It's a great way to learn about a fellow writer--what she wants from her writing, and even from life. Your offering tells a bit of your new journey on WDC and some trouble you experienced. Then you tell us what you hope to do here. I liked both parts. The first thing I noticed was the format of your letter. I think you have some misplaced carriage returns--some of your paragraphs aren't properly aligned or spaced. Of course, that an easy fix. May I suggest you remove the opening lines before Dear Me? It distracts the reader and isn't necessary. Also place your word count on a separate line at the end. Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. I've found the best method of editing is reading your piece out loud. You'll hear those places that need attention, such as commas for pausing and rewording run-on sentences. My Rating. 4.0. I hope you continued writing a Dear Me letter to begin each year. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion. Reviewed by JACE My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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