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#1188309 by iKïyå§amaCabre


Hallo!
I visited your portfolio as it is your WDC Anniversary.

At the outset - I like the way you've presented your writing 'Cottage Door', 'Kennel', 'Office' and more! Very creative!

The title and brief description work. I'm wondering where 'Family' fits as a genre. For the layout, I'd suggest WritingML - font, size, linespacing ...

The poem itself uses some powerful imagery and metaphors. I could visualise each nuance as I read along. My favourite bit is : graceful as he sinks within cushions of air

There's just one slight quibble - I found this a bit prose-aic for a poem. I know it's a style choice and if it works for you, that's great. But as a reader, I'd have liked a bit more lyricism and perhaps some more metaphors.

Thanks for sharing this!
Write On!
- Sonali

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