the dinner seating chart [13+] the dinner seating chart for writers's cramp |
An Angel Army Review Hi JCosmos . Good morning. I found your offering in the Read & Review section. I'm Polter-JACE: Cruising ... , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "the dinner seating chart " . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story. Overall Impression. Actually, I really enjoyed reading your story. It had an interesting premise. I thought your story dragged on a bit when reading about all the tables and guest lists. I recognize there are many folks from our past who could be included in such a party. But after six or seven tables of guests, I wondered, "How many more...?" I think you need to explain Jake Lee's credentials earlier in your piece. I mean, why choose him to help; he was not famous. Your ending was both humorous and spot on. I could actually hear Trump saying those very words. Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. Watch for punctuation issues: He turned to St Peter his capable XO to arrange the dinner. He turned to St Peter, his capable XO, to arrange the dinner. As a reader, I was distracted by the double-spaced lines. It seemed a chore to scroll through so much just to read, especially the table seating. My Rating. 3.5. You have an above average piece that needs attention to be great. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion. Reviewed by JACE My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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