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Review #4726741
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 Passageways Open in new Window. [18+]
Flash fiction entry
by BeeSmith Author Icon
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Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi BeeSmith Author Icon. Good morning. I found your offering in the Read & Review section.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Passageways" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. You display a great deal of emotion in such a short piece. On the one hand, you show the uselessness and desperateness of war with the turmoil inside Terrano. Your mother, however, displays a freedom that cannot be taken away. She has a mindset that gives her strength that Terrano desires.

Good job conveying those sentiments.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet*  Your writing mechanics are very good. I found no issues with your writing technique.    

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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