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 My Mind's Place Open in new Window. [E]
What a wonderful place
by strlcuckoo Author Icon
Review of My Mind's Place  Open in new Window.
Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi strlcuckoo Author Icon. Hello. I found your offering in the Read & Review section.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "My Mind's Place" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I like reading form poetry as there are tangible things to which I can refer when offering any feedback, such as rhyme, which you did well.

The feelings you evoke in your piece are obviously heartfelt. But I wonder about the almost overwhelming amount of repetition with the one line: Within my mind lies a special place

I have no trouble with some repetition. But this line is half the poem. As a reader, I found myself skipping forward instead of reading every line.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* I found no issues with the writing mechanics of your poem.    

*Star* My Rating.  4.0. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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