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 Anonymous: Blurb Open in new Window. [E]
The blurb for my Young Adult mystery novel, Anonymous.
by Ezrenee Author Icon
Review of Anonymous: Blurb  Open in new Window.
Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Ezrenee Author Icon. You offering came up on the Read & Review section.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Anonymous: Blurb" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I thought your item was good ... as far as it goes. If this was designed to pull me in as a reader, it came up a bit short.

For example, I didn't understand why you are using the title Anonymous. Also it seemed as if the information provided was out of order. I think that knowing something is out of sorts in Toronto should be upfront, indicating the potential problem. Then introduce your heroine and friends.

You need to hook your reader, especially in your 'Blurb.'

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet*  Watch out for sentence fragments.   A flame that burns the city of Toronto to ash.  

*Star* My Rating.  4.0. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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