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 Democracy on Trial  Open in new Window. [E]
Democracy on Trial for Weekly Challenge
by JCosmos Author Icon
Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi JCosmos Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Democracy on Trial " Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression.Though you wrote your offering in 2022, it seems very prophetic. It's only been a year and how Democracy has been more maligned. I fear for our future.

Your Acrostic format is good. I've used this form, as well as the Double Acrostic, several times. It's an enjoyable format to use.

However, it seems to me that since you're not trying to rhyme each line (or alternating lines), your poem would read easier as complete lines. See below. I stumbled over a couple spots while reading it.

Also, I'm not sure you need to state "Select an 8-letter word as your title, then start writing!" After all, Democracy is a nine-letter word. Just say "Select a word."

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* One example:  Democracy on trial  Democracy is on trial

*Star* My Rating.  4.0. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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