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 Suitcase Open in new Window. [E]
What I was left with when you left with the rest of my life.
by Lou-Here By His Grace Author Icon
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Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Lou-Here By His Grace Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Suitcase" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. A heartfelt and poignant look at a broken heart. I've always admired people who can work through the grief of a lost love by pouring those feels on a page.

Of course I've had my share (perhaps then some) of heartaches. And while writing is a true passion for me, I'm unable to pen that ache into submission.

Thanks for sharing.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* While I seldom comment on things like grammar and punctuation in poems--often a poet breaks such rules for sake of expression--I stumbled over your final stanza while reading. I understood what you were trying to say. But I had to re-read it several times to see it. My problem was use of the word "rebuild".

Your thought left me hanging. Rebuild to me signifies looking to the future. I know ... my problem.

*Star* My Rating.  4.0. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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