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 The Praying Mantis  [E]
A haiku, the grace of a praying mantis.
by Lenna Rivoli
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Lenna Rivoli ,

"The Praying-Mantis" is a captivating haiku that offers a vivid glimpse into the world of the insect while evoking a sense of reverence and divinity.

The first line, "Long limbed and graceful," immediately draws attention to the physical attributes of the praying mantis. The choice of "long limbed" conjures an image of elongated limbs, creating a visual impression of elegance and delicacy. This line establishes a strong foundation for the subsequent descriptions, setting the stage for the portrayal of the insect's poised demeanor.

The second line, "In a solemn stance of poise," introduces a sense of mindfulness and intentionality. The use of "solemn" suggests a solemn seriousness, emphasizing the gravity of the mantis's posture. The word "poise" further reinforces the idea of balance and grace, portraying the insect in a state of poised readiness. This line not only describes the physical posture of the mantis but also alludes to a deeper, almost meditative quality.

The third line, "Saintly and divine," elevates the haiku to a spiritual dimension. The choice of "saintly" implies a sense of purity and holiness, while "divine" amplifies the religious undertones. This line adds a layer of metaphorical significance, inviting readers to perceive the praying mantis not merely as an insect but as a symbol of reverence. The use of religious imagery enriches the thematic depth, transforming the haiku into a contemplative piece.

The overall theme revolves around the praying mantis as a symbol of grace, poise, and perhaps even spiritual significance. The haiku beautifully captures the essence of the insect's physical and metaphorical qualities, merging the tangible with the transcendent. In terms of form, the haiku adheres to the traditional structure of three lines with a 5-7-5 syllable count. This form enhances the concise and focused nature of the poem, allowing it to convey a vivid image and evoke a specific emotional response.

As a suggestion, consider exploring the use of a specific season word (kigo) to enhance the haiku's connection to a particular time of year. This could further anchor the poem within a seasonal context and contribute to the traditional aspects of haiku.

In conclusion, this is a beautifully crafted haiku that seamlessly combines visual imagery with metaphorical depth, and perhaps a bit of personification. Your choice of language and thematic exploration results in a haiku that resonates with a sense of reverence and contemplation.

Sincerely,

Brian
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