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 Four letters and a river of definitions Open in new Window. [E]
What is your definition of this simple word?
by R Author Icon
Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi R Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Four letters and a river of definitions" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I admit that I have a hard time reviewing free form poetry. But I'm trying to push myself into other areas of writing. I found your offering in the Read & Review section.

Your title enticed me into reading your poem. I wanted to know what the four letters were. You're right--these letters do indeed offer a host of definitions. Your poem made me think of my life and how it's progressed to present. That itself gives your poem a measure of success.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* A suggestion:  Your third line essentially begs for this. Or, at least some semblance of letter separation.  L. I. F. E.

         *Bullet* Again, free form poetry is hard to review. There are so many things to consider. For myself, I think these two lines should be together, thereby matching the rest of your lines.  
Lessons we didn't study for
Yet got tested
 Lessons we didn't study for, yet got tested

*Star* My Rating.  4.5.. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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