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 Longing to See Sis  [13+]
An elegy for my older sister who passed away Dec. 19th, 2017 AABB 12 syllables per line.
by Thaddeus Buxton Winthrop
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Thaddeus,

"Longing To See Sis" is a heartfelt elegy that beautifully captures the essence of love, loss, and the enduring connection with a departed sister. The poem exhibits a genuine emotional depth, conveying the profound impact Linda had on the speaker's life.

The style of the poem is sincere and evocative, allowing the emotions to resonate with the reader. The straightforward language adds to the authenticity of the piece, making it accessible and relatable. The use of rhyme, particularly in pairs, enhances the rhythmic flow, contributing to the poem's musicality. For instance, in the lines "Your smile lit up our hearts, and still does to this day. / We miss hearing your laugh, so we take time to pray," the rhyming creates a gentle, comforting cadence.

The theme of longing and reminiscence is poignantly conveyed throughout. The speaker expresses the ache of missing Linda's presence, from the warmth of her smile to the joy of hearing her laugh. This theme is universal, and many readers will connect with the emotions of yearning for a loved one.

The form of the poem adheres to a consistent structure, utilizing quatrains with alternating rhyme. This provides a sense of order and symmetry, enhancing the poem's overall cohesiveness. The simplicity of the form complements the straightforward language, contributing to the poem's accessibility.

The use of specific details, such as Linda's homemade apple jelly and her love for pranking with flamingos, adds a personal touch to the elegy. These details create a vivid image of Linda, making her presence palpable in the poem. The mention of the flamingo prank becomes a poignant symbol, representing the lighthearted and playful memories shared with Linda.

One suggestion could be to explore more varied poetic devices to enrich the imagery and evoke a deeper emotional response. Consider incorporating metaphor or symbolism to amplify the impact of Linda's influence. Or, just something to consider incorporating when crafting that next poem. Expanding on the symbolism of the pink flamingo could provide a nuanced layer to this piece.

"Longing To See Sis" is a touching tribute that resonates with genuine emotion. The heartfelt expressions of missing Linda and cherishing her memory create a moving elegy. I found it beneficial to read and consider your poem for this feedback.

Sincerely,

Brian
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