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 InSect  [E]
... sap stealer
by AXiLeA
Review of InSect  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dear Axilea,

I've been keeping a poem of yours in my cue to review, wanting to reconnect here after all these years. Hope you are well. Would like to offer my reaction with some feedback.

I found "InSect" to be a thought-provoking poem that delves deep into themes of nostalgia, memory, and self-identity. The use of introspection is quite apparent throughout the poem, inviting readers to reflect on their own experiences and emotions.

The style of the poem is unique and distinctive, and while English may not be your first language, your choice of words and phrases adds a certain rawness and authenticity to the piece. It feels like a deeply personal reflection, which is a strength of the poem. However, in some instances, the broken English can make comprehension a bit challenging. For example, the lines "sap stealer -" and "forehead airbrushed -" could benefit from a bit more clarity or context.

You have effectively employed poetic devices to enhance the overall impact of the poem. The use of symbolism with the beetle armor and references to transformation and recollection adds depth to the narrative. The juxtaposition of "dead brilliance" and "stolen metal" conveys a sense of loss and impermanence, which is a poignant theme.

To improve the poem, consider providing a bit more context or narrative flow in certain sections. For example, the lines "flawless, washed and de-sinned / disinfected, forehead airbrushed -" could be expanded upon to help readers better understand their significance. Additionally, the poem could benefit from a more structured rhythm or meter to enhance the overall flow.

Overall, "InSect" is a powerful piece that showcases a fascinating and thought-provoking piece to consider. You are a skilled writer with a unique voice and perspective. It's a vivid exploration of great emotions and memories, and with some minor adjustments for clarity, it could become even more impactful for your readers.

Your old poet pal and Facebook buddy from WDC,

Brian

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