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wearing green for St Patrick's Day
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Greetings! This one showed up on 'read and review'.

I like the poem which shows you are proud of your Irish roots. My favourite part was '17 other things'! That made me smile.

The tone is light and conversational, and it was a fun poem to read.

SUGGESTIONS:
1. I think I'd have liked more about what the 17 other things are! Maybe a verse about it, or maybe a note at the bottom ... ?
2. I also find that the poem deals basically with being proud and wearing green. Maybe you could add what sort of green clothes - T-shirts, Hats, and so on (and especially if there is some special type).
3. With regard to the layout - would'not you like to make the whole poem green? I think it would enhance the impact of your words.
4. Also with regard to layout - maybe some emoticons, to bring out your words?

Thanks for sharing this poem!
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