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 Get rhythm shoeshine boy  Open in new Window. [E]
A songwriter finds his muse
by H❀pe Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I like this on several levels. It's an insight into that will o' the wisp, inspiration. And it's a tale of how a song came to be written. Plus, it's an uplifting tale, a story of hope in the meanest of situations. You tell it so well, we can almost hear the rhythm tapped out by the shoeshine boy. The reader feels as though he's been there and seen this - though how many of us have really seen a shoeshine boy in action?

Description is so important to this piece - yet not flowery, expansive lists of emotive words, but bald statements of fact, as though we sit with Johnny, taking in the glimpses of the scene as they occur. It's unobtrusive description like this that convey the essence of the story, much of it to do with sound and music as inspiration reaches Johnny as he watches. In these moments is creativity born.

It's a gem of a piece, one that I can't fault (although I would suggest that you pick a genre other than Other to attract more readers). Well done.

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