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 The Dance of All Peoples Open in new Window. [13+]
A mystical prayer for world peace and mutual understanding.
by The White Lotus Author Icon
Review by Brian K Compton Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Dear The White Lotus Author Icon,

I discovered your poem today after going through my old poems to delete. I checked my feedback and found yours and wanted to send a review back, I had discovered this high rated poem and wanted to offer my own reaction with some feedback.

"The Dance Of All Peoples" presents a compelling theme of unity and mutual understanding. The poem's style is straightforward, making it accessible to a wide range of readers. It carries a message of hope and inclusivity, inviting people from different backgrounds to come together and dance for the sake of a better world.

One noteworthy aspect of your poem is its use of colorful imagery, particularly in the lines, "A rainbow full of color stands before you / Yet all you see is red, purple and blue." This imagery vividly conveys the idea that diversity should be celebrated, and people should look beyond surface differences to appreciate the richness of the human experience.

The poem also employs repetition effectively with the phrase, "Dance with me," emphasizing the call to unity and action. This repetition creates a rhythmic quality that enhances the poem's overall flow.

However, here are three suggestions that could further improve the poem:

Enhance Metaphorical Depth
While the poem's message is clear, it could benefit from deeper metaphors or allegorical elements that add layers of meaning. For instance, you could explore the symbolism of the dance itself, relating it to the complexities of human interactions and relationships.

Diversify Poetic Devices
While repetition is used effectively, incorporating other poetic devices like metaphor, simile, or symbolism can add depth and richness to the poem. For example, you could compare the dance to a river of unity flowing through diverse landscapes, highlighting the beauty of its meandering course.

Expand on Conflict Resolution
The poem briefly mentions disagreements among people, but it could delve deeper into the idea of conflict resolution and the transformative power of dance. Expanding on this theme could make the message more poignant.

Incorporating these suggestions could elevate your poem into a more layered and emotionally resonant piece of poetry. I too celebrate the differences in our approach to the craft we are enamored. It’s nice to see the world through someone else’s vision, who will step back and do the same, as you had done for me. *Heart*

Nevertheless, your poem is a heartfelt call for unity and understanding, and its message is timely and important.

Sincerely,

Brian
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