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| (3.5)| Hello Jacky  This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   I found your flash fiction piece on the Read and Review page. You did a good job relaying a whole story in such a short piece. I would have liked to read about the confrontation to see what took place. I think that would have added quite a bit to the story. But I do see it's a contest entry, so you may not have had the word count needed. You may want to consider adding the other two genres. Maybe consider Sci-Fi/Drama or Adventure. A lot of readers find items to read just by searching certain genres. It may help bring in more readers to your port.  Title and Description - The title is okay, but you may want to add an actual description of a short blurb about what the piece incorporates. It may help urge readers to read on. Theme/Subject Matter:- A couple of aliens come to Earth to have an 'Earth' experience. They come in peace, unable to do harm to humans or have humans do harm to them. Characters - The characters are amusing and come off as quite innocent. Originality/Creativity:- I thought this piece was delightfully creative and definitely original. Nicely done. Emotion/Impact: - I was kind of amused by the writing. I do wish the final conflict could have been penned. My Suggestions - speak earthspeak Earth blabbering! blabbering?  twenty three twenty-three that knowwho knows  Summary:Thanks so much for sharing your flash fiction piece with us. I enjoyed it. KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Intuey   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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