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I am very much impressed, with the subject you have chosen to write this poem. It is an extraordinary effort. There is no doubt about it.
What is a sign of a soul? This is too simple. We can understand it through it's consciousness. We know that the existence of the soul must be there in every living being. If we do not find that consciousness in a body, we declare the body becomes dead.
In that poem, the floor is classically compared with the soul where the wetness with the consciousness. It is hard to maintain a balance with our desires but not impossible. When the surface dries, that indicates death.
The style of thinking is a fantastic one. But your execution is not up to the mark. You need more practice.
Another fault is you describe it well but can draw an image that will make your readers bored. Take care about readability.
My suggestion is that you have promise. Just do some work about these basic things. You must be a good poet. Go ahead.



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